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I love the line 'The beam laid a path quite simple to see.' It felt like you trusted me as the reader. Can you describe the experience of falling in love without saying you fell in love? I start to feel it in your recollection of 'your eyes and the ring of your laugh.' The 'we' in this opening is strong too. It brings the reader into the shared experience.

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