The Birch Tree
Thanks for the input. Here is the 90% complete version. After one year it be 99% cured.
This is a quick turn around of a rewrite. I knew the substack readers were a sharp eyed group. I’m sure you’ll spot the changes. The tree, being the star said, “I need more lines!” All I do is soothe egos.
The Birch Tree There is a void that comes with no poetry. It’s a hole with wooly edges of stupidity or whatever is the opposite of imagination- that sparkling tingle that can see around corners, see faces on bark, in leaves and branches, in clouds. It imputes the coziness of bird and squirrel nests, the thrill a leaf feels unfurling on a luscious spring day. Later, after tossing on the branch, blowing and spinning and waving around, the sigh it emits when it softly lands on a bed of moss. And then there’s this old birch tree, its top gone, ringed with mushroom, girded with a clothesline. When the cabin went up he was a sapling and soon festooned with swimsuits and towels, T-shirts and initials. Fifty years is long enough for a birch tree. He is waiting for a storm. Waiting to tip over and lay down with a sigh. Swans-9/23
Really like the rewrite, and greatly respect and admire your generosity in inviting your readers (also writers for the most part, but still) into the midst of your writing process. Brave! And, in this case at least, possibly inspirational.
This is perfect, Wes